Talk:Typhoon Jebi/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 01:21, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will do tomorrow. Noah^Talk 01:21, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

was ~~an extremely damaging tropical cyclone that became~~ the strongest typhoon to strike Japan since Yancy in 1993 as well as Japan's costliest typhoon I would cut this since the latter half of the sentence explains its damage in more detail.
Jebi formed from a tropical depression south-southwest of Wake Island on August 26 I assume you meant disturbance.
before becoming the twenty-first named storm of the 2018 Pacific typhoon season on August 27. Delete before.
then rapidly intensified as it passed the Northern Mariana Islands on August 30 I would change then to "and later".
Subsequently, Jebi reached peak intensity as a powerful typhoon on August 31 Add "its" before peak. Also, I would rather you say Category 5-equivalent instead of a powerful typhoon as it gives more detail on the intensity and is less subjective than "powerful".
Jebi caused large waves along the coast of Taiwan that caused at least six fatalities I would change that to "resulting in" to vary it up from the previous portion.
and power outages affected storage of livestock and produce Add "the" before storage.
repairs to the bridge only completed seven months later I would replace only with were

Met

Link Coordinated Universal Time on the first mention of UTC.
as Jebi developed maximum sustained winds of 95 km/h (60 mph) I would change Jebi to "its" since the name has already been mentioned. Also, I would say "maximum sustained winds increased to..." rather than developed
The JTWC analysed that Jebi intensified into a super typhoon Could you add a note explaining what the minimum threshold for this status is?
The cycle completed by 21:00 UTC on August 31 while Jebi began to curve northward through a weakness in the subtropical ridge,[17] however drier air then began to impinge on the southern portion on the circulation, resulting in continued weakening. Could you split this after ridge? Also, however should have a comma after it.
causing convection to warm Add its before convection.
As a result, the JTWC assessed that Jebi weakened below super typhoon status at 18:00 UTC on September 1. I would say "had weakened" and "by 18:00 UTC".
despite Jebi maintaining a ragged yet well-defined eye.[22] This should be split off into its sentence. It is also missing a word.
Later on September 3, an extratropical cyclone approaching Jebi from the northwest began to accelerate Jebi north-northeast I would remove the first mention of Jebi.
with the JTWC declaring Jebi no longer a tropical cyclone "Declaring that" and "Jebi was"
before also declaring Change also to later.

Effects

At Kankūjima (the island of Kansai International Airport) I would say "the island where ... is located".
- I just changed it to mention KIX only - since the airport covers the entire island there's really no difference. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 14:29, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
significantly higher than Add "which was" before this part.
Restoration works completed fully only on September 20 This is a bit jumbled.
nearby Itami Airport and Kobe Airport --> "the nearby Itami and Kobe Airports" You can maintain links on just the first part of the names.
off Kushimoto, Wakayama Comma after the second part of the location.

That should be it for this article. Noah^Talk 23:12, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hurricane Noah: should be done. Hope I didn't miss anything - am somewhat tired now since school's resumed and I have to readjust my sleep cycle. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 14:29, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]