Talk:The Bakery (recording studio)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: FuzzyMagma (talk · contribs) 17:49, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

I will review this FuzzyMagma (talk) 17:49, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

Just finished addressing the issues! GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 20:45, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

nope you did not. actually the one your removed made sense to stay as they were direct quotes that are hard to paraphrase. You actually still have three long unnecessarily quotes.

• "scrapping most of the stuff and having to start again, because we hadn't spent enough time rehearsing or writing"
• "a full-blown 21st-century facility, with a Pro Tools HD system, a Slate Raven MTi touchscreen controller, a couple of racks full of outboard gear, and an SSL Matrix rather than a traditional studio console"
• "come in every day, with no pressure on time, and just work on [their] music"

put back the "rehearse, write, work on artwork or just relax" because it is in the lead.

You still have a reference in the lead that is not serving an purpose FuzzyMagma (talk) 22:26, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

You said "limit yourself to 3 quotation or less for an article of this size". Why is it a problem having three quotations now and not then? GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 02:54, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

Other than that, is everything alright now? GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 02:55, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

please see WP:Quotes. What you are quoting here is not needed to be quoted and please tune it down. Just fix the article. You are almost there FuzzyMagma (talk) 09:36, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

Done. GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 13:42, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   see comments

   Pass or Fail:

Comments

• nice that you have a redirect to The Beehive (recording studio)
• There is an excessive use of quotation that can potentially lead to quick fail for the article under criteria 2 if not resolved ASAP. Please paraphrase the quotation and leave the most critical ones. limit yourself to 3 quotation or less for an article of this size

Lead

• The Bakery is a recording studio in 2A Fleet Road, Hampstead, London, England. is not included in the article. Please include in the article with the reference (remove it from the lead)
• Remove other references in the lead or move them to the article per MOS:LEADCITE
• remove the word " tumultuous" and try to avoid these kind of wording, see WP:WTW
• add a caption to the picture in the infobox which one the Bakery
• talking about the image, I am not convinced that it is free. I found the original on REDDIT and it is not related to the account you described on the picture attribution. I have no clue what it Reddit image policy but you need to prove that this image is free. Please also check if you can instead use it as non free image.

I'll address the other issues shortly, but the photo you found is not the original. I asked for my Coldplay friends on Twitter for a donation, Frank's picture didn't showed up because his account is locked (https://i.ibb.co/2st2WMS/Screenshot-1.png). This is the original file I used: https://pbs.twimg.com/media/F4U61YaWIAA7f89?format=jpg&name=large

Oh, and you can tell these photos are different by the windows too. GustavoCza (talk • contribs) 19:22, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

I can see that now. I approve the image then FuzzyMagma (talk) 22:29, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

Foundation

• I understand the use of quotation for Chris Martin comment but not for "an estate agent and tiny restaurant". Please just paraphrase and remove the quotation.

Recording

• same excessive quotation problem

The Beehive

• same excessive quotation problem, e.g., "traditionally rehearse on Thursdays". Just paraphrase please

References/spot checks

• Ref. 2 has a list which strange, please fix
• Ref. 1: this is a forum. Not acceptable. replace please
• Ref 6: no mention of the "University College London"
• ref 9: a borderline primary source but checks out Y
• ref 13: Y
• ref 14: another borderline primary source Y

External links

• need to be removed they are all irrelevant

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