Talk:Sun Is Up/GA2
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:34, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- I would change "while also included on" to "and also included on" as it sounds better to me.
- For this part "was described as a rave pop track", I would either attribute who is doing the describing (i.e. a critic, a fan, Inna herself) as it is incomplete without attribution, or just say that it "is a rave pop track".
- I would change "with it being compared to" to "and was compared to" to simplify the language and make it flow a little better.
- For the infobox, I would move "CD single" in front of "Digital download" to put things in alphabetically order.
- Great work with everything else here.
- Background and composition
- I would link Inna on the first time that you mention her in the body of the article.
- I would change "in collaboration" to "a collaboration".
- I would change "bare-naked" to just "naked" as it sounds rather informal in the current phrasing.
- I would change "the track was only featured on the British version" to "the track was featured on the British version". I am assuming that I Am the Club Rocker was also released in Great Britain so it would also be featured on that album as well so the "only" part seems to be unnecessary.
- I would link "refrain".
- I would move the part from Urban.ro to the reception section as it more of a review for the song than an objective statement about it. You can still keep it in the caption of the audio sample (as it is a smart placement for it).
- Reception and accolades
- Great work with this section. The part on the One Direction video was pretty interesting lol.
- Music video
- I would change "bare-naked" to "naked" for the reasons that I have stated above.
- Otherwise, wonderful job with this section.
- Live performances
- I would add the year in which "Señorita" was released.
- For the sentence starting with "In 2011", I would break it up into two or more sentences as it is a rather long, run-on sentence that lists all of the performances. It seems rather overwhelming to me to read.
- Final comments
- Great work with this article. I enjoyed reading more about this song, though it is honestly my least favorite single from Inna (I have to agree with the screaming criticism). Once my comments are addressed, I will promoted this to a GA. Thank you for introducing me to Inna's music btw. Have a great rest of your day or night! Aoba47 (talk) 01:53, 5 January 2018 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: Hi and thanks as always for reviewing! I believe I have adressed all your points. Regarding your comment, "Sun Is Up" is also not necessary my favorite Inna song out there... I think it was a blind success for Inna, as it still remains one of her signature singles. One recent day when I was buying shoes in Germany, where I live right now, I heard it on the radio lol ;) Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:35, 5 January 2018 (UTC)
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