Talk:SkyLoop/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 21:43, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

Review

Prose review

Lead

• "although none have yet to be built." --> "those have not been built yet"

History

• "The world's first SkyLoop was Sky Wheel which opened in 2004 and is currently located at Skyline Park in Germany." --> "The world's first SkyLoop, Sky Whell, opened in 2004 and is currently located at Skyline Park in Germany."
• "This model would continue to be the only model" --> Redundancy of "model".
• "built to this day" --> change it with an specific date [e.g. "built as of March 2012"]
• "none have been built to this day" --> Same recomendations as above, reword, add an specific date.

XT 150

• "The train is then lowered..." --> "it is then lowered..."
• "board the ride" --> I guess that "borad the train" is more accurate.

XT 450

• "This model is an extension of the XT 150 as the beginning is the same." --> "of the XT 150; the beginning is the same."

I believe I have addressed the above concerns in this edit. Themeparkgc  Talk  22:59, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

General comments on broadness

• Is there any information about:

• Who first designed the rolled coaster? [person or group]
• Why the X-Coaster was closed? [Although I see it has its own article]

I've added a brief statement regarding X-Coaster's closure in this edit with an appropriate source. Themeparkgc  Talk  23:15, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

• I think that the table does a good job, although I'd also like more information about each installation, but that's me being nit-picky.

What sort of information were you thinking of? Themeparkgc  Talk  23:15, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

I don't exactly know. Don't pay attention to it, i'm just leaving some thoughts :P These comments are optional. — ΛΧΣ21™ 23:18, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

• Everything else seems to be good.

— ΛΧΣ21™ 22:02, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

• Well, I am passing the article. My general comments can be added/addressed later, they are optional. Article meets GA criteria. — ΛΧΣ21™ 23:20, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

Thanks Themeparkgc  Talk  00:07, 22 November 2012 (UTC)