Talk:Poppa's Got a Brand New Badge/GA1
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Reviewer: Starstriker7(Talk) 04:17, 2 July 2011 (UTC)
I'll do this review. --Starstriker7(Talk) 04:17, 2 July 2011 (UTC)
Criterion 1 (concise, clear prose; good grammar/spelling; complies with MOS' lead, layout, W2W, fiction, and list incorp guidelines)
[edit]Lead
[edit]- "This in turn results in an increased crime-rate, to which the police are powerless." - This line just seems a tad awkward to me. Can you rephrase it?
Plot
[edit]- "a huge riot and looting occur" --> widespread rioting and looting occur?
- "house, someone stole" --> house, someone steals
- "Homer decides to take action by finding it." --> Home decides to take action by looking for it?
- "more efficient and successful" --> more efficient and more successful?
- "citizens he protected" --> citizens he protects
- "Maggie, who fired at the mobsters" --> Maggie, who fires at the mobsters
Production
[edit]- "After having moved in" --> After moving in,
- "instructing the audince" - Well... :P
- "High Noon, however, the line" --> High Noon, although the line
- "which Gould was a "big fan" of." --> of which Gould was a "big fan".
Cultural references
[edit]- "Homer tells Marge about all the jobs he has had" - Can you work this in such a way so that "had" is in the present tense?
- "one of his ferrets are" --> one of his ferrets is
Release and reception
[edit]- "Stuart O'Connor was favorable as" --> Stuart O'Connor's review was favorable as
Criterion 2 (all info cited by inline cites in a ref section; reliable sources cover challengeable materials; NOR)
[edit]- All the refs check out. My only comment here is what I asked in the past two episode reviews I've done, I feel that you should cite the statistics in the lead.
Criterion 3 (addresses main aspects of topic; stays focused)
[edit]All set here!
Criterion 4 (no undue weight)
[edit]Looks good here. :)
Criterion 5 (stable)
[edit]The edit history checks out.
Criterion 6 (images tagged with copyright status; fair use images tagged; appropriate images and captions)
[edit]The Mantegna image checks out.
Overall comments
[edit]This review took a surprisingly short amount of time. Congrats on another great article. It will be officially a good article after you address the few nitpicky comments I've raised. :) --Starstriker7(Talk) 05:47, 2 July 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for the thorough review! :) Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:57, 2 July 2011 (UTC)
- You are welcome! I'm passing the article now. --Starstriker7(Talk) 22:16, 2 July 2011 (UTC)