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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 19:29, 24 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • The lead should summarize the rest of the article. Add a few lines or two to it to make it longer.
  • There are a lot of short sentences that could be combined into larger paragraphs, particularly in the biography section.
  • "Biography" section: His birthdate should be here, and include a reference.
  • "In 2001 he met his future wife, Pattie, while serving at Coast Guard Station Neah Bay." -- The part about meeting his wife should be moved to "Coast guard service." Generally we want the article to flow chronologically.
  • Any idea what high school he attended, or at least where he went to school? There's mention of college, was there a college he was attending or planning to attend?
  • "He is survived by his wife, Pattie, and his daughter, Harper Natalie Bruckenthal, born after his death." -- This should be moved to right after the sentence where he met his wife, and probably could just say "He had one daughter, Harper Natalie Bruckenthal, born after his death."
  • "Petty Officer Bruckenthal is buried at Arlington National Cemetery." -- Should be moved to the end of "Attack on the Persian Gulf" section.
  • "Bruckenthal was posthumously awarded the Bronze Star with Valor and the Purple Heart for his actions.[1]" should be moved to right after the details of where he is buried.
  • "The Unaccompanied Personnel Housing building at Coast Guard Station Montauk is named in honor of DC3 Nathan Bruckenthal.[3] He served as a fireman on the USCGC Point Wells, which was homeported in Montauk, New York.[4]" -- since this is so short, it can be folded into the "Awards and decorations" section, and just renamed "Awards and honors," or something like that.
  • One of the reference links is dead. See: [1]
  • Reference number 5 should be put into a cite web template.
Altogether the article needs a little reorganizing to be a GA. I'm putting it on hold pending these changes. —Ed!(talk) 19:42, 24 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I reviewed this article 10 days ago, and pinged the author a week ago. Having seen no activity from him, and having received no further work to improve from anyone else, I am failing the Good Article. It may be renominated once these issues have been addressed. Thanks! —Ed!(talk) 15:19, 6 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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