Talk:Michael's Birthday/GA1
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GA Review[edit]
Looking good. Some suggestions:
- Kevin spends the day waiting to see if he has skin cancer - maybe "waiting to find out"?
- Could you incorporate something about the reception into the lead?
- Done
- which puts a smile on Carol's face - "which makes Carol smile"? Simpler.
- Pam expresses her feelings on the "great day" - what does this mean? What are Pam's feelings, or are they simply that she believes it is a great day? Maybe reword this.
- Plot section uses "ice skating" while Production uses "ice-skating" with a hyphen. Change either to the other for consistency.
- It's fine to say that Nancy Walls is Steve Carell's wife, but the fact that they met in one of his classes is pretty trivial and irrelevant to the rest of the article.
- Michael Sciannamea of TV Squad wrote that the episode "simply the best one yet" - "the episode was..."
- Link Television Without Pity.
- Done (I keep forgetting that it has its own article) --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 01:35, 16 August 2008 (UTC)
- Remove poll to the public from OfficeTally.com per WP:MOSTV#Reception.
- TV.com (ref 1) is not considered a WP:RELIABLE source as it is user-edited, so should be removed. It doesn't need to be replaced; the episode itself verifies this fact.
That's about all. You've got a week to make changes while the article's on hold, so good luck. —97198 talk 01:27, 16 August 2008 (UTC)