Talk:Josh Beckett/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 01:01, 11 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 01:01, 11 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the lead and some ref issues to start things off (I had the review almost done until my comp crashed and lost it, so I'll re-do it tomorrow):

Ref 44 (http://www.boston.com/sports/baseball/redsox/extras/100_random_things_2009/) is a deadlink
The sportsillustrated.cnn.com links (5 in all) don't work due to their recent change; fix the links. I wouldn't be against just removing the URLs since the site has been a problem at times.
Add a quick note about his 14 injury+retirement in the lead. Wizardman 02:38, 12 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Since the above has been fixed, I will do the rest of the article tomorrow (had planned to do it tonight but somehow the day got by me) Wizardman 04:44, 18 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here's some more issues, through Marlins

With the first para of early life, I can't tell of the growth spurt was the reason for his return to the team, the higher GPA, or a mix of both (it reads like the latter, but i'm not sure if that's the intent). A rewording may be helpful here.
"In his senior season, Beckett, by this point nicknamed "Kid Heat,"[1] and was named the High School player of the year by USA Today." either it's missing a word somewhere or the and should be removed.
Quotes need to be cited; add one for Avila's quote.
Not sure if the signing subsection is needed; it could be combined with the minors.
"but he eventually signed on August 28, 1999 to a four-year $7 million contract, that " rm comma before that
"was the youngest opening day starter in the teams history." team's
"His next start, in game one of the 2003 NL Championship Series against the Chicago Cubs did not go well " comma after Cubs
Not sure if having the Steve Bartman sentence is useful for Beckett's article since he didn't play in game six.
You note two performances en route to a World Series MVP, but only mention one, plus the Rodriguez sentence feels a bit tacked on, not flowing with the rest of the section. That paragraph could use rewording.
"Coming off his World Series heroics," this part's not needed.
You use both post-season and post season. Keep consistent (and i think both are wrong anyway, isn't it postseason?)
"He made his 100th career start on September 8 against the Washington Nationals" While fine, to me this doesn't feel like it adds much of anything to the article, just feeling thrown in. If important, perhaps find a stronger reference for that.
(Jumping down to the bottom of the article here) combine the retirement and consideration sentences; can't have one-sentence paragraphs.

I'm finding a lot of little stuff so it's taking me a bit longer to get through the article. Will continue work on it tomorrow. Wizardman 04:29, 19 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

And here's the comments for the rest of the article:

"In a deal that was made official on Thanksgiving Day, 2005," comma not needed after day
"On July 18, 2006," given that the previous two sentences note the year it's not really needed here.
"before turning in a masterful game five where he struck out" again, be careful of the journalese; rm masterful and reword. There's a few spots like this in the Red Sox section that will need tweaking, actually.
" On September 16, he recorded his 1000th" 1,000th

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the remaining issues are fixed. Wizardman 04:35, 20 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I think I got everything. Let me know if there is anything else or if I missed anything. Spanneraol (talk) 15:07, 20 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good after a read-through, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 04:57, 21 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]