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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 10:47, 11 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take this one up as well, review coming soon. Kosack (talk) 10:47, 11 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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Early life

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  • Part of the full name sourcing issue above, it may be best to open with his full name here.
  • Might be worth linking catch to Catch (game).
  • Sanchez and his dad > his father
  • Link Most valuable player again.
  • "won the Western State Conference Most Valuable Player (MVP) Award", Most valuable player is used above this. Move the brackets there and use the shortened version here.
  • The link to Jack Wilson is piped to a redirect, no need for a redirect if you're already piping.
  • "Sanchez was signed by scout Ernie Jacobs", firstly I can't seem to find any mention Jacobs in the ref provided. Also, I'm not really sure what you mean by signed by a scout?

Boston Red Sox: Major League Debut

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  • Headings should use sentence format, so debut doesn't need capitalising here.
  • I think Steven Kent is linked to the wrong person. Should it be Steve Kent (baseball) instead?
  • The Mike Gonazalez link is piped to a redirect and Anastacio Martínez has a diacritic in his name.

Pittsburgh Pirates: Batting Title, All-Star

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  • Same with the headings, title doesn't need capitalising.
  • Link bone spur to Exostosis.
  • "he wound up spending the first half of the 2004 season", wound up seems a little informal. Perhaps simply, "he spent"?
  • I was wondering if we have a suitable link for write-in votes and came across Write-in candidate. However, it makes no mention of baseball so it's probably a little too loose. Thoughts?
    • I took a look at the article, and it seems to be focused on political elections, so I'd agree it's probably too loose. If a sports section is ever added (or a sports equivalent is created), that would be appropriate to link. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 16:51, 11 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "setting a career-high with 85 RBI", the refs at the end of this sentence should be in numerical order.
  • "Sanchez received the Tony Conigliaro Award", probably worth adding what the award is given for.
  • "Batting .230 entering the Pirates' game July 21", on July 21?
  • "On July 21, he hit a three-run inside-the-park home run against Tim Byrdak as the Pirates defeated the Houston Astros 9–3", the source for this game is dated 22 July?
  • "the first six-hit game by a Pirates since" > Pirate or Pirate's player.

San Francisco Giants: World Series Champion

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References

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  • Typo in ref 33 (Priates)
  • Avoid shouting in ref titles, per WP:ALLCAPS. Ref 43 should drop the "UPDATE" down.

Another good piece of work. Only some minor things to point out which I've posted above. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 15:08, 11 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Another point I see.... the article categorizes him as having Mexican descent, but that's not mentioned anywhere in the text. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:33, 11 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All of my points above have been suitably addressed, so I'm satisfied that this meets the relevant GA criteria. Happy to promote. Kosack (talk) 12:15, 12 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]