Talk:Eliza Meek/GA2

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:17, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article, will post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:17, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The comments in the previous review by Aoba47 have been addressed (I wonder if he/she has any more comments to make), no dablinks, no copyvio detected. Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:47, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General

There are some instances of WP:OVERCITE. Try to limit the number of citations after a line to three, you are not stating anything too controversial here.

Did my best. Some sources I felt were necessary to include. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 10:23, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think you do not need too many to support the line where you mention Eliza's sister. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:55, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: Done.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 11:39, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Looking at the length of the article and per WP:MOSLEAD, the lead should be at least a good para long covering all the major points of the article.

Did my best.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 10:35, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Good job! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:55, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

She grew up with many siblings It should be clear that "she" refers to Eliza and not Betsy.

Done.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 18:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Relationship with Lunalilo

Emma was the widow of Kamehameha IV and a close friend of Lunalilo Place this introduction to Emma where or before you first mention her.

Done. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 10:23, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Later life

I am not sure I understand "general breaking". Does the source not say anything more or give an idea of what it was?

No it does not.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 10:13, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Let me know of there is any other comments or concerns as well.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 12:54, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Sainsf: @KAVEBEAR: You have covered the primary things that I would have addressed. One minor note that I would add is to include an alt for the image. Other than that, great work with the review both of you! Aoba47 (talk) 15:28, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Alts are not mandatory but it is beneficial to add them. This article can be promoted now. Cheers Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:41, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks!--KAVEBEAR (talk) 18:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]