Talk:Edea Kramer/GA1
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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 20:47, 12 November 2019 (UTC)
I will review this within the next few days.--Alexandra IDVtalk 20:47, 12 November 2019 (UTC)
- Appearances
Edea first appears in the PlayStation video game Final Fantasy VIII.
- I would probably suggest being a little more specific and calling it a PlayStation role-playing video game.- This section uses some FF-specific terms without defining them first: What or who are Galbadia, SeeD, Squall? Rinoa appears to be a person, what does it mean when it says that they are "taken over"? I assume it's mind control again, but it's not clear.
- Reception
Her outfit was praised by website staffs
- it is clear that it's the websites' staff who wrote this, so I would probably just straight-up say it was praised by "publications including [A, B]"- I'm unsure about the "particularly her breasts" bit, and would probably prefer to just describe her as attractive.
There weren't too many problems here! I'll put this on hold for now~!--Alexandra IDVtalk 22:10, 14 November 2019 (UTC)
- Fixed all, I reckon. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 22:29, 14 November 2019 (UTC)
- Looking good! I will pass this~!--Alexandra IDVtalk 23:07, 14 November 2019 (UTC)