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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:56, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
I'll take a look Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:56, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
- At first look, the article is comprehensive (which is good), but somewhat verbose - I can see multiple places where the sentences can be trimmed like this.
The Corsican nuthatch appeared in the scientific world....- why not "The Corsican nuthatch was discovered.."?
The Corsican nuthatch consumes mainly pine nuts, but also small flying insects in summer, as would a flycatcher.- why is the flycatcher comparison important here- Hi there, Done. 122.55.139.176 (talk) 06:47, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
generally avoid "very" ...as in not very shy. - why not just "not shy." ?- Removed
spotted a male Corsican nuthatch and shot the individual.--> "spotted and shot a male Corsican nuthatch."- Replaced
He kept the specimen's skin [and did not bother with it] until October--> if we lose the bracketed bit...do we lose meaning?- Still probably the same anyway.
for help in naming some small birds he had been able to collect--> "for help in naming some small birds he had collected"- Replaced
Whitehead's opinion was that the bird was not a species that could be described.- this is also verbose though I can't think of a simpler way right now- I ended up removing it, because i think its repetitive on orevious statement.
link Altai, subgenus, vicariance- Linked
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so no confusion is possible- redundant. Anyway, you mention something it could be confused with next. Better to just remove. no meaning lost- Removed
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however, it may be reminiscent of the coal tit (Parus ater), which is very common in Corsican forests and has similar markings on its head--> "however, its head markings resemble those of the coal tit (Parus ater), which is common in Corsican forests"- Replaced
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The most geographically related nuthatch is the Eurasian nuthatch which inhabits mainland France- wordy, trim to " The Eurasian nuthatch is found in mainland France"- Removed
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You could remove almost all the "very"s - they don't add anything.- Removed
The Corsican nuthatch is the only current species of bird endemic to Corsica, and even to metropolitan France.- "current" redundant" - also link endemic- Done
Ummm.....Eliomys quercinus is a dormouse not a ferret- Oof, this happen probably when I worked this article and Algerian nuthatch that time. Replaced. 2001:4455:30B:6C00:E403:1634:334A:2FD6 (talk) 12:29, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
1. Well written?:
- Prose quality:
- Manual of Style compliance:
2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
- References to sources:
- Citations to reliable sources, where required:
- No original research:
3. Broad in coverage?:
- Major aspects:
- Focused:
4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
- Fair representation without bias:
5. Reasonably stable?
- No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):
6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
- Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
- Pass or Fail: I suppose I would not have split out discovery and nomenclature into separate sections but given how this bird has been studied makes sense. Overall, nice work. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:07, 30 March 2022 (UTC)