Talk:Candyman (Christina Aguilera song)/GA2

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 06:46, 29 July 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• "recorded by American recording artist Christina Aguilera, on her fifth studio album, Back to Basics (2006)"..... from Back to Basics.
• "peaking within the top 20 of most countries"..... let's give some specific names of countries here
• "Aguilera performed the track on a number of shows"..... provide the names of shows
• "covered on several occasions"..... include who covered it

Background and release

• The first four sentences of the first paragraph belong in the Back to Basic album page, not here. The rest of the paragraph belongs in "Composition"
• "was purchased on iTunes"..... released
• "It was also available as a maxi single there on September 1, 2007"..... released as
• This section may as well simply be "Release" due to its "background" info relying on album background rather than song background

Composition

• "At the beginning, the lyrics are" → "The song opens with the lyrics"
• "He's a one-stop shop/ Makes the panties drop"..... needs space between "shop" and "/"
• Per WP:OVERCITE, a ref doesn't need to be used more than once in a row per paragraph, so remove the first instance of ref#27 (Rolling Stone)

Critical reception

• "criticized the song's lyrics for being too sexual"..... a bit too long, try "criticized the song's sexual lyrics" or "criticized the song's sexual content"
• More WP:OVERCITE of ref#27
• I find it interesting how Jenny Eliscu both praised the song AND found it to be a possible rip-off Andrews Sisters' "Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy". Looking into the ref, she doesn't definitively call it a rip-off (uses the word may), so let's replace "She also called 'Candyman' 'a dead rip-off'" with "though suggested it might be 'a dead rip-off'"
• Remove "on it" from "but praised Aguilera's vocals on it"
• Work source for Sean Daly's review is missing
• For some reason, ref#33 is listed as "Yahoo" yet links to an About.com review from Bill Lamb, which is unreliable per WP:ALBUM/SOURCES.
• Work source for Stephen Thomas Erlewine's review is missing
• Include the name of the reviewer from The Guardian
• BMI (ref#37) supports an award for "Ain't No Other Man", but not this track

Chart performance

• Music Canada (ref#45) is dead
• RIANZ (ref#61) is dead

Music video

• More WP:OVERCITE with ref#62 (MTV)
• "PopCrush" (ref#65) is unreliable
• Remove the comma after "John Montgomery for MTV News"
• Let's make note that Justin Timberlake's "What Goes Around... Comes Around" won the VMA award.

Live performances and covers

• I'm skeptical about London Evening Standard (ref#68)
• More WP:OVERCITE of ref#69
• "The performance was supported by dancers"..... included dancers
• "jazz legends" is borderline POV, try "jazz artists"
• ref#71 (IMDb) is unreliable
• ref#72 (NME) links to the site's main homepage
• Link Back to Basics Tour after "The song was later performed during the worldwide" instead of in the photo caption
• ref#75 (RCA Records) is dead
• ref#76 (Daily Mail) is unreliable
• Remove the comma after "series" in "American TV series, Glee"
• "The version was well received by critics"..... The Glee cover
• I'm skeptical about TVLine (ref#79)
• "X Factor (Poland)" should link to X Factor (Polish TV series)

Credits and personnel

• "Source:"..... not very fitting, you can just say that credits were from album booklet

Charts and certifications

• ref#89 (RIANZ) is dead

Release history

• The "label" section of the table needs to be closed off

References

• MTV News should not be italicized in ref#1
• "Wenner Media" should link to Jann Wenner in ref#2
• See note on ref#1 regarding ref's #5 and #7
• Publisher for Amazon.com (all languages) is Capital Group Companies in ref's #8 through #11
• iTunes Store should not be italicized in ref's #13, #14, #15, #16, and #17
• See note above on ref#'s 8 through 11 sources regarding ref#'s 18 through #20
• Publisher for The Boston Globe (ref#22) is Richard H. Gilman
• Remove "PopWatch" from ref#23 (Entertainment Weekly)
• AllMusic should not be italicized in ref#26, and "Thomas Erlewine, Stephen" should read "Erlewine, Stephen Thomas"
• Accessdate for ref#28 (Billboard) is missing, unless the URL to this cannot be found
• Sputnikmusic should not be italicized in ref#29
• IGN should not be italicized in ref#31
• Ref#34 (BBC Music) should not be italicized in ref#34 and read BBC, publisher is British Broadcasting Company
• Publisher for The Guardian (ref#35) is Guardian Media Group
• Publisher for The New York Times (ref#36) is Arthur Ochs Sulzberger, Jr.
• UK Singles Chart should not be italicized in ref#46
• Remove "swisscharts.com" from "Christina Aguilera – Candyman – swisscharts.com" in ref#48, and
• ARIA Charts should not be italicized in ref#60
• See note on ref#1 regarding ref#66
• MTV should not be italicized in ref#67
• In ref#69, "MTV UK" should read MTV
• See note on ref#1 regarding ref#70
• Digital Spy should not be italicized in ref#77
• "Buzz Media" should link to Spin Media in ref#78
• ref#89 (Record Industry Association of New Zealand) should read "RIANZ" to match other refs
• "Mega Single Top 100" should not be italicized in ref#90
• "Swiss Singles Chart" should not be italicized in ref#91
• See note on ref#46 regarding ref#92
• "Ultratop & Hung Medien / hitparade.ch." should just read "Ultratop & Hung Medien" in ref#93
• ref#95 is missing its work/publisher fields

I'm really sorry, but the issues with prose and references are simply too extensive. Failing this as a result.