Talk:Armistead Abraham Lilly/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:34, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

No comma needed after "and businessperson"
Comma after "March 4, 1913" per MOS:DATECOMMA
"Raleigh County and served in this position until 1908" → "Raleigh County, a position he held until 1908"

All comments have been implemented in the article. -- West Virginian (talk) 23:37, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Early life and education

Comma after "March 25, 1878" per MOS:DATECOMMA
No parentheses around "and six sons"
""Miller Bob,"" → ""Miller Bob"," per MOS:LQ
""lizard glades."" → ""lizard glades"." per MOS:LQ
""Owl River school."" → ""Owl River school"." per MOS:LQ

All comments have been implemented in the article. -- West Virginian (talk) 23:37, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Early law and political careers

Link "bar" to Bar (law)
""fighting Republican."" → ""fighting Republican"." per MOS:LQ
Comma after "January 9, 1901" per MOS:DATECOMMA

All comments above have been addressed. -- West Virginian (talk)

To whom did he lose the 1910 election?

I am working to answer this question as we speak. -- West Virginian (talk) 23:40, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have added in additional content regarding the 1910 Republican nominee selection process, in which Lilly lost to incumbent Hughes. Please let me know if this works, or if more or less detail is needed. Thanks again! -- West Virginian (talk) 15:13, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Attorney general

No commas needed around "without opposition"

This comment has been addressed. -- West Virginian (talk) 23:39, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Virginia debt case

Per MOS:LARGENUM, the significant sums described in this section should be rounded, as it doesn't appear that there's any significant reason to include the exact dollar and cent amounts

Thank you for this suggestion! I rounded the dollar amounts, and also rounded the converted amounts in the inflation template. -- West Virginian (talk) 15:20, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Later political career

No comma needed after "for the Republican nomination"

Completed. -- West Virginian (talk) 16:30, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

A little more description on why the feud began would be nice

Added info on the beginning of the feud in the attorney general section and then modified the wording in the later political career section. Please let me know if this works! -- West Virginian (talk) 16:30, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Business affairs

the asbestos roof paint "Leak Not" to prevent leaks and black metal paint "Rust Not" to prevent rust. confusing syntax

I changed to "which manufactured the asbestos roof paint, "Leak Not", and the black metal paint, "Rust Not"." Please let me know if this works better. -- West Virginian (talk) 16:34, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Later life and death

"which exceeded 20,000 attendees on its second day, and had notable attendees including" → "which exceeded 20,000 attendees on its second day. Notable attendees included"
Link World War II

Complete. -- West Virginian (talk) 16:32, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Personal life

"He and his wife had" → "Together they had"
Combine first two paras as they are both about his family, and it reduces the rate of 1-2 sentence paragraphs

Both complete. -- West Virginian (talk) 15:23, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

[17] and [20] are not duplicate refs but appear to be from a first glance; I'd recommend adding 1911 and 1914 in parentheses to distinguish
Per MOS:ALLCAPS, both of those refs should also be rendered in title case and not all caps

Added 1911 and 1914 in parentheses to distinguish, and removed all caps. -- West Virginian (talk) 16:37, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Images are public domain and obviously relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks good

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — Ghost River 16:08, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, I truly appreciate you taking the time to perform this thorough and comprehensive review for this GAN! The article is much improved because of your suggestions and recommendations, and I have addressed them all in the article. Please review and let me know if there are any outstanding issues that I can address in the meantime. Again, I appreciate your time and expertise! -- West Virginian (talk) 16:39, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for making those changes, happy to pass! — Ghost River 21:30, 7 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, it was a pleasure working with you throughout this process and I look forward to working with you again soon! Thanks again! — West Virginian (talk) 22:49, 7 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]