Talk:American Airlines Flight 327/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: RecycledPixels (talk · contribs) 16:43, 9 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 05:31, 29 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this review. Please respond to comments with {{done}}, {{not done}}, etc. Thanks, Pi.1415926535 (talk) 05:31, 29 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I recall that TF Green is not actually in Providence - it's in nearby Warwick, Rhode Island. Several of the other airports also seem to be outside their respective municipalities. The article should reflect that. Other than TF Green, the others can probably just say "near" rather than "in".
Given the number of intermediate stops, I would recommend just having the count of stops in the infobox and lede. The list of them can stay in the Background section.
The Convair CV-240 family article doesn't mention a "CV-240-0" model, so "CV-240" is probably fine for the infobox.
I recommend some sort of geographic view - at very least coordinates. Even better would be a map (perhaps using {{maplink}}) showing the various airports and the crash site.

Use semicolons to separate the various airport locations
The airline had operated... Either remove "had", or change the final words to "since 1948."
The Passengers and Crew sections should be moved to subsections here (except for the details about injuries suffered, which can go in Aftermath)

Remove "it" from then it struck
"the" is incorrectly capitalized in the second paragraph
If you have the link to TF Green, then link Tulsa International Airport as well
Adjust time formatting per MOS:TIME
The last sentence can be shortened to The accident was the first fatal accident that American Airlines had experienced since Flight 476 in August 1955. The details of that crash aren't relevant here.

There's some run-on sentences in this article that could use fixing. The one starting with After the crash is a typical example with three commas.

When moving this to Background, it can probably become a single paragraph.
Since the engines weren't significant to the crash, I don't think the details about them are needed. Same with the final sentence of the section.
Providence to Tulsa isn't what I would usually call a "short-haul route", though I suppose the individual segments were short. Might be worth clarifying.

I recommend using the same sentence structure to introduce the captain and first officer - right now they're completely different structures for the same set of information.
With the injuries moved to Aftermath, this can be one paragraph.