Talk:1962 Rangoon University protests/GA1

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Reviewer: Lingzhi2 (talk · contribs) 00:18, 7 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

You've been waiting a long time. I'll do this, but it might be 2 or 3 weeks before we're finished. ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 00:18, 7 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Thus, personal advancement through education was one of the four major channels for social mobility in Burma at this time." Either delete the word "four" or mention the other three. Since they are not mentioned yet, it seems they are not important... so deleting the word "four" might work. ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 09:06, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Ne Win addressed the nation in a five-minute radio speech portraying the incident as the work of a treacherous group of communist students" Was this speech the same day as the attack on the students? [The Ne Win article says it was 8pm]... If so, I would consider moving that paragraph about the speech up into the previous section... And then changing the section header from "General Ne Win’s state-of-the-nation address and the demolition of the Rangoon University Students' Union (RUSU) building" to "Demolition of the Rangoon University Students' Union (RUSU) building".... and then...
Why is there a discussion of who ordered the building to be destroyed way down in the "focal point for later activism" section? I'm talking about text following "Moreover, Ne Win also explicitly denied any involvement in dynamiting..." I think that should be moved up into the section about dynamiting the building. ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 09:14, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

WP:COPYVIO from Burma's Student Movement: A Concise, a blog post from 1994:

:was expelled from his hostel because he did not get on well with his warder. On 9 May, some students were arrested for demonstrating at the Dutch Embassy."
"in Mandalay Hall alone more than 17 students died according to the official records" ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 14:01, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Got some WP:OVERCITE, such as "at 6:00 a.m. on 8 July 1962.[33][5][37][38]", "opinion against the new military regime.[33][10][4][39]". ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 15:08, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Image placement poor. ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 15:08, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Got a "citation needed": "...already injured after this first clash.[citation needed]" ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 15:09, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Student arrests and closure of universities in November 1963" section is one sentence long. The section title has 9 words; the section has 40.
Similarly, all headings are long and ungainly. One refers to the article title.
This article needs work, sorry. FAIL GA nom. ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 15:38, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Lingzhi2, did you not want me to address the issues? I was away for a holiday but I am back now. If it is too far from GA, nevermind. But if you think the issues are fixable, I would like to fix them including the COPYVIO which does not look that bad and seems fixable. If there many more issues than you list above, then we can leave this as a fail. --- Coffeeandcrumbs 15:52, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I am concerned that there might be even more copyvio, which would take a long time to uncover. Plus there are many more surface problems that are easy to fix but would take time. ~~You could take this to GAR and ask for a review,~~ or you could just start fixing it now and re-nom for GA later. If you do the latter, and if I am still available at that time, I could re-check it as soon as you re-nom it.... Eh, it seems my recollection from a decade ago is wrong. GAR only looks at current GAs and decides whether they should be relisted... sorry for confusion... ♦ Lingzhi2 (talk) 16:16, 14 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]