Talk:James Stewart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 04:43, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 04:43, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Passing comments...

• "At first, he had trouble being cast in Hollywood films owing to his gangling looks and shy, humble screen presence. [40] His first on-screen performance was an unbilled appearance in a Shemp Howard comedy short called Art Trouble in 1934.[41] His credited first film role was the Spencer Tracy vehicle The Murder Man (1935).[42] Rose Marie (1936), an adaptation of a popular operetta, was more successful and led to his Stewart's casting in eight films in 1936.[43][44" -reps of first!!

• I'm more than happy to receive criticism and make changes to this article, but I don't understand what you mean by this one, would you mind clarifying? Skyes(BYU) (talk) 16:46, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Repetition of the word "first".

• Done. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 16:29, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

• I'd like to see more quotes from critics of his performances.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:55, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

• Do you mean you would like to just see generally more quotes from critics (good or bad), or do you mean you want to specifically see criticism of Stewart's performances? Skyes(BYU) (talk) 17:00, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Good or bad criticism of his performances. I think it could do with some quality quotes of some of his more notable performances to reinforce the article.♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:08, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

• I added some quotes for his best and most well-known performances. Let me know if you would like more. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 18:39, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

My comments

General

• Too much overlink of films and other celebrities/people. Just linking them once is enough (Link in the lead as well if you have mentioned them). De-link the rest.

• I think I managed to remove most of the excess links. Also, after reviewing the infobox, the information appears in the article and is referenced. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 18:32, 27 August 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• "The characters he appeared as spanned a wide range of subjects and appealed to large audiences." — Maybe rephrase it as "The characters he played spanned a wide range of subjects and appealed to large audiences."
• Wikilink "MGM" and expand it to its full-form like say "Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer (MGM)" since you are mentioning it for the first time. Do the same as well when you mention it for the first time in the body of the article (If you haven't done so already).
• Wikilink Broadway, Frank Capra.
• "he is most known" can be rephrased as "he is mostly known".
• I hope you have the proper references for the details in the infobox. Just clarifying.

• All done. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 19:42, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
• Hello, @Ssven2:, do you have any more suggestions or criticisms for me? Skyes(BYU) (talk) 17:35, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

I'll look further into it tomorrow. Sorry if I'm slow at the review.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 18:01, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

No worries. I just wanted to check in. Take your time. Thank you. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 20:30, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

When I said, "no worries, take your time", I meant to take a week or two to complete the review if you need it. Out of courtesy for nominators, I always complete my GA reviews within one week (if I can't for some reason I make the waiting period explicitly clear). You expressed interest in this page. You even went as far as to contact me on my talk page to ask if you could review the page but it's been over two months and you have barely reviewed past the lead section. I know this article is long and it's okay to be "slow", but slow is different than doing nothing at all.

I have a serious goal to get this article to FA and used this review as a formality to get some feedback as I've been told this article is already nearly at FA standards. I'm not trying to be abrasive, I just have serious ambitions about this article and I don't have the patience to wait around for months to get feedback. I will give you a few days to resume the review, if not I will either request another reviewer or list this review for deletion and direct this article towards more efficient preparations. I do appreciate the criticism offered because it did improve the article; however, it's important to be courteous to nominators by completing the review in a reasonable amount of time. Thank you. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 21:16, 22 October 2019 (UTC)

I am sorry, my friend. I am unable to complete this review and I've been rather busy too irl. I hope you bear no ill will against me for this because I really wanted to do this review but am unable to do so owing to life outside of Wikipedia. Please do accept my sincerest and deepest apologies. Btw, the article looks really excellent. Just needs a bit of copyediting and a source and image review.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 09:16, 25 October 2019 (UTC)