User contributions for 86.47.161.201

9 March 2010

• 15:3015:30, 9 March 2010 diff hist +210‎ Ryle Nugent ‎No edit summary

12 November 2008

• 18:5818:58, 12 November 2008 diff hist +776‎ Talk:And/or ‎ keep it simple
• 16:5216:52, 12 November 2008 diff hist +612‎ Talk:And/or ‎ →‎XOR
• 16:2116:21, 12 November 2008 diff hist +1‎ Iarnród Éireann ‎ was missing a space between two words
• 12:0712:07, 12 November 2008 diff hist +374‎ Talk:KompoZer ‎ merge?

11 November 2008

• 16:2916:29, 11 November 2008 diff hist −92‎ Vengaboys ‎ removed "It is believed that one of the girls infact a transvestite, but this is yet to be confirmed." if it isn't just vandalism it is still unsubstantiated speculation and shouldn't be in the lead

10 November 2008

• 15:5615:56, 10 November 2008 diff hist −4‎ Bryce (software) ‎ Better writing style to avoid starting sentences with "But" (or "Because").

6 November 2008

• 15:5915:59, 6 November 2008 diff hist +8‎ Peaches (The Stranglers song) ‎ rephrased to avoid starting sentence with "Because", poor grammar
• 14:4614:46, 6 November 2008 diff hist −4‎ MP3 ‎ avoid [and/or], the possibility of both is implied in normal usage.

4 November 2008

• 17:0017:00, 4 November 2008 diff hist −19‎ Terminator Salvation ‎ removed description of Marcus Wright as "the new terminator" as it is speculation until the film plot is fully known
• 12:2712:27, 4 November 2008 diff hist +1‎ Hunger (2008 film) ‎ writing used the wrong tense, again the section was written like a news article instead of an encyclopedia article
• 12:2612:26, 4 November 2008 diff hist −3‎ Hunger (2008 film) ‎ information was out of date - bad encyclopedic writing - now updated and written in a way that shoudn't need to be updated again.
• 10:2110:21, 4 November 2008 diff hist +163‎ Talk:Carrot Top ‎ →‎surgery and buffin' up
• 10:1510:15, 4 November 2008 diff hist +1‎ Carrot Top ‎ currently, lately, recently, .... article needs rewriting in encyclopedia style instead of news writing

3 November 2008

• 15:3815:38, 3 November 2008 diff hist +156‎ Talk:Luis Villa ‎ Luis comments in his blog

31 October 2008

• 12:2812:28, 31 October 2008 diff hist +23‎ Edward Pilgrim ‎ sentence assumes you already know "the Terry Gilliam film Brazil" by only calling it "Brazil", so rephrased to give adequate context

30 October 2008

• 16:2116:21, 30 October 2008 diff hist +1,392‎ User talk:Addshore ‎ →‎Jason Kay
• 14:3814:38, 30 October 2008 diff hist −34‎ Burton Silver ‎ removed words like "recent" that make the article dated

29 October 2008

• 12:3812:38, 29 October 2008 diff hist −63‎ Jay Kay ‎ Undid revision 248391800 by Addshore (talk) section needs rewording. welcome to help improve, or provide alternative
• 12:3412:34, 29 October 2008 diff hist +182‎ User talk:Addshore ‎ help me fix the poor wording
• 12:3012:30, 29 October 2008 diff hist −63‎ Jay Kay ‎ rephrased to avoid non encyclopedic writing that included unspecified times and dates.
• 12:2312:23, 29 October 2008 diff hist +60‎ Jay Kay ‎ sentence needs to be rephrase and date references provided. good citation of the source would be helpful too but this section doesn't read properly as an encyclopedia

23 October 2008

• 09:5309:53, 23 October 2008 diff hist +71‎ Kerry Katona ‎ "currently" is news writing not encyclopedic writing, date reference and preferably a decent citation needed.

17 October 2008

• 15:4215:42, 17 October 2008 diff hist +4‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎No edit summary
• 15:3415:34, 17 October 2008 diff hist −239‎ Fight Club ‎ summary overly long, removed uncited comment about homoeroticism which is included later in the article with proper citation and context
• 15:2215:22, 17 October 2008 diff hist 0‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎ s/him/her. wrong pronoun. strange
• 15:2015:20, 17 October 2008 diff hist +1‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎ moved detail about Clark acting with Rockwell to the Filming/Production section, says more about Clark than it does about Rockwell.
• 15:1815:18, 17 October 2008 diff hist −105‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎ cast listing is overly detailed, repeating plot sxummary. short one line description is more in keeping with other articles, & noting "Doctor" Paige Marshall using inverted commas is a more subtle
• 11:5211:52, 17 October 2008 diff hist +225‎ User talk:86.47.161.201 ‎ →‎Talk Page Comments
• 11:2811:28, 17 October 2008 diff hist +85‎ Wikipedia:Spoiler ‎ make it clearer that spoilers shouldn't be all over an article. edit, rephrase, or at least move to talk. deletions not helpful, considered hostile.
• 11:2311:23, 17 October 2008 diff hist +679‎ User talk:86.47.161.201 ‎ →‎Talk Page Comments
• 10:5810:58, 17 October 2008 diff hist +327‎ Wikipedia:Spoiler ‎ basic writing style, keep it chronological. justify on talk page why need consensus Undid revision 245749949 by Everyme (talk)
• 10:4410:44, 17 October 2008 diff hist −1,648‎ Wikipedia talk:Spoiler ‎ it is good writing style, explain on article talk why consensus needed?! Undid revision 233835177 by Jason Quinn (talk)
• 10:4110:41, 17 October 2008 diff hist −17‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎ rephrased the premise section so as not to describe the ending/twist about Paige until as late as possible in the paragraph
• 09:4009:40, 17 October 2008 diff hist −42‎ Choke (2008 film) ‎ removed spoiler, belongs in plot summary if anywhere

16 October 2008

• 16:3216:32, 16 October 2008 diff hist +327‎ Wikipedia:Spoiler ‎ better structure to reduce the impact of spoilers

13 October 2008

• 14:1314:13, 13 October 2008 diff hist −1‎ Cable (character) ‎ s/loose/lose
• 14:1214:12, 13 October 2008 diff hist 0‎ Cable (character) ‎ spell checking is a job for computers

10 October 2008

• 14:3414:34, 10 October 2008 diff hist +4‎ Galway Girl (Steve Earle song) ‎ some eejit [banjaxed|http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/banjaxed] the page formatting. attempted to fix it.

8 October 2008

• 09:5909:59, 8 October 2008 diff hist −4‎ Moongate ‎ avoid And/or. poor pedantic writing style and hurts the flow of readability
• 08:4708:47, 8 October 2008 diff hist +34‎ Christ myth theory ‎ rephrased link text to avoid the convoluted word "historicity"

7 October 2008

• 10:2410:24, 7 October 2008 diff hist −7‎ Bloomberg Terminal ‎ don't start sentences with preposistions. keep it simple, use don't "utilize". changed "By utilizing" to "Using"

3 October 2008

• 12:1812:18, 3 October 2008 diff hist −6‎ Opera (company) ‎ wikipedia is not a news site, different writing style required. do not say "current". replace "is currently filing" with "In 2007 Opera filed"

2 October 2008

• 16:4516:45, 2 October 2008 diff hist +72‎ The Brian Jonestown Massacre ‎ rephrase. writer focussed prose. no context given. assumes reader knows anything about relationship with Dandy Warhols.
• 16:4516:45, 2 October 2008 diff hist +4‎ Anton Newcombe ‎ →‎Early life
• 16:4116:41, 2 October 2008 diff hist −8‎ The Brian Jonestown Massacre ‎ the use of "current" is not good encyclopedic writing. word deleted
• 16:4016:40, 2 October 2008 diff hist +175‎ Dig! ‎ removed unexplained unnecessary - _lazy_ - acronyms
• 11:3211:32, 2 October 2008 diff hist 0‎ Prohibition ‎ "utilized" is an ugly word, "used" is better and "enforced" fits the sentence anyhow.

1 October 2008

• 11:3011:30, 1 October 2008 diff hist −13‎ Sean Hughes (comedian) ‎ encyclopedia not a newspaper, deleted "has recently"
• 10:4810:48, 1 October 2008 diff hist +132‎ Sophia Myles ‎ now, currently, recently ... rephrased to avoid time words.