User contributions for 104.244.192.86

12 December 2017

• 19:4119:41, 12 December 2017 diff hist −1‎ OxiClean ‎ →‎History: correct "Billy" to "Mays"
• 19:3919:39, 12 December 2017 diff hist −2‎ OxiClean ‎ rmv quotation marks from product name
• 18:2718:27, 12 December 2017 diff hist −12‎ Medical Hypotheses ‎ rmv puffery "prestigious"

11 December 2017

• 13:5013:50, 11 December 2017 diff hist −43‎ Crisco ‎ →‎Kream Krisp: rmv incongruous (and sourced by a permanently dead link) ", and Crisco was reintroduced to the market"—there has been no mention in this context that Crisco was ever removed from the market
• 13:4713:47, 11 December 2017 diff hist −6‎ Crisco ‎ →‎Kream Krisp: no justification for boldface on product name this deep into the article—readers looking for it will see the section heading before they see it in the text
• 13:4113:41, 11 December 2017 diff hist +27‎ Crisco ‎ →‎Changes in fat content: tag another weasel
• 13:3813:38, 11 December 2017 diff hist +31‎ Crisco ‎ →‎Changes in fat content: tag weasel
• 13:2813:28, 11 December 2017 diff hist −4‎ Trans fat regulation ‎ →‎History: no justification for italicizing the name of a company
• 00:3500:35, 11 December 2017 diff hist −29‎ Michael A. Bilandic ‎ →‎Later career/Personal and death: ce; separate absurdly jumbled (and titled) section into two sections
• 00:2700:27, 11 December 2017 diff hist +1‎ Michael A. Bilandic ‎ ce intro
• 00:2300:23, 11 December 2017 diff hist −119‎ Harold Washington ‎ →‎Legacy: ce; WP:SURNAME; rmv unsupported editorial analysis "Despite the bickering in City Council, Washington seemed to relish his role as Chicago's ambassador to the world"
• 00:1500:15, 11 December 2017 diff hist −39‎ Harold Washington ‎ →‎Rumors: ce; rmv editorial "Coincidentally," and "just"; correct verbose and euphemistic "followed him in death" to "died"
• 00:0600:06, 11 December 2017 diff hist 0‎ Jane Byrne ‎ correct typo
• 00:0100:01, 11 December 2017 diff hist −3‎ Jane Byrne ‎ →‎Early life and career: ce; correct unnecessarily verbose "stay at home wife" to "housewife"; add links

10 December 2017

• 23:4823:48, 10 December 2017 diff hist −29‎ Jane Byrne ‎ ce intro; rmv two instances of uselessly ambiguous "to date" plus their associated verbiage

9 December 2017

• 20:5120:51, 9 December 2017 diff hist −3‎ Judy Garland ‎ →‎Final years: correct euphemistic "Issues" to "Problems"; rmv editorial "just"
• 20:4920:49, 9 December 2017 diff hist −157‎ Mark Herron ‎ rmv absurdly unencyclopedic "Fans of the cable TV show ''Mystery Science Theater 3000'' may recall his performance ..."—this is an encyclopedia, not a fan magazine
• 20:3320:33, 9 December 2017 diff hist −607‎ Me and My Shadows: A Family Memoir ‎ →‎Overview: rmv the last two ¶s: they are melodramatic, unsupported ({{cn}}'d almost 11 years ago) excerpts from interviews totally unrelated to the book which is the subject of this article
• 20:2220:22, 9 December 2017 diff hist +24‎ Judy Garland ‎ →‎The Gumm Sisters: ce; rmv quotation marks from block quotation; link to The Judy Garland Show; correct non-neutral "claimed" to "said"
• 20:1220:12, 9 December 2017 diff hist +18‎ Judy Garland ‎ →‎Early life: ce; correct "'Suzy/Suzanne'" to "'Suzy' or 'Suzanne'"—nobody was ever called a double nickname like "Suzy/Suzanne"; add that the rumors about Frank were never verified

7 December 2017

• 05:5205:52, 7 December 2017 diff hist +17‎ Naked Lunch (Austrian band) ‎ repair infobox image caption and add link to DE article on festival
• 05:4505:45, 7 December 2017 diff hist −36‎ Naked Lunch (Austrian band) ‎ ce intro, rearranging some facts more logically, pruning unencyclopedic language like "musical scene", clarifying what a cryptic phrase like "The Notwist/Weilheim" actually means without having to jump off-page to find out, etc

6 December 2017

• 16:3316:33, 6 December 2017 diff hist −1‎ Nematode ‎ rmv vestigial close-quotation mark from block quotation—the corresponding open-quotation mark apparently was deleted (properly, per MOS:BQ: "Do not enclose block quotations in quotation marks") sometime in the past
• 16:1916:19, 6 December 2017 diff hist −12‎ Eruca sativa ‎ correct curly to straight quotation marks; rplc informal, relatively obscure "stymie" with more standard and more widely understood "hinder"

5 December 2017

• 21:5721:57, 5 December 2017 diff hist −8‎ Chicago (That Toddlin' Town) ‎ rmv inane, meaningless "notably", which adds ambiguous verbiage but nothing of value to the sentence
• 17:2917:29, 5 December 2017 diff hist +3‎ List of television series canceled after one episode ‎ rmv "(for example, Virtuality)": it is inappropriate (since no specific examples of other cases are given) and unnecessary (since it adds no real value in this context); clarify the description
• 17:1417:14, 5 December 2017 diff hist −3‎ List of television series canceled after one episode ‎ rmv unnecessarily ambiguous "and/" from "or"; ce; correct "either case" to "any of those cases", since more than two are given; chg awkward "extremely" to "very", which is less distracting when used repeatedly within a sentence
• 17:0317:03, 5 December 2017 diff hist +312‎ Jack Lescoulie ‎ →‎Television: add image caption; rmv superfluous editorial analysis "He was a purveyor of light features": besides, any word that requires a Wiktionary link should be used in Wikipedia ONLY if no alternative exists
• 16:1916:19, 5 December 2017 diff hist −27‎ Jack Lescoulie ‎ →‎Television: rmv editorial puffery "was a versatile cast member", again allowing his accomplishments (detailed immediately following) to speak for themselves; correct biased (and slang) "line" to neutral "explanation"
• 16:1116:11, 5 December 2017 diff hist −12‎ Jack Lescoulie ‎ →‎Radio: rmv inane puffery "future TV legend" (his accomplishments, which speak for themselves, are enumerated in the same sentence); remove slash
• 16:0916:09, 5 December 2017 diff hist −7‎ The Phil Silvers Show ‎ →‎Premise: rmv misleading puffery "famous": the overwhelming majority of Wikipedia readers (well over 99%) have never heard of that specific episode—and if it were truly famous, there would be no need to TELL anybody that it's famous
• 06:3206:32, 5 December 2017 diff hist −5‎ Kewpee ‎ →‎Lima, Ohio: rmv inappropriate boldface
• 06:3006:30, 5 December 2017 diff hist −14‎ Fort Jefferson (Florida) ‎ →‎Construction: correct several bizarre constructions using "would" to simple past tense verbs
• 06:1906:19, 5 December 2017 diff hist +28‎ Everglades ‎ need to specify what date "to date" refers to
• 06:1306:13, 5 December 2017 diff hist −38‎ Schlörwagen ‎ translate editorial enthusiasm into encyclopedic language
• 06:0606:06, 5 December 2017 diff hist −60‎ Streamline Moderne ‎ →‎Industrial design: rmv unsupported editorial flourishes from image caption
• 05:5805:58, 5 December 2017 diff hist +41‎ Kewpee ‎ →‎Lima, Ohio: fix image captions
• 04:1504:15, 5 December 2017 diff hist +12‎ Silicone ‎ →‎Uses: ce; correct three instances of slash ("/") to "and"
• 04:0704:07, 5 December 2017 diff hist +4‎ Silicone ‎ correct "... and/or ..." to "... and ... or both"

4 December 2017

• 14:1214:12, 4 December 2017 diff hist +55‎ SCOBY ‎ WAY too technical in the very first ¶: phrases like "a syntrophic mixed culture, generally associated with kombucha" (wtf is kombucha?) and "take place concurrently along an oxygen gradient" must be rewritten in language human baings can understand
• 13:1713:17, 4 December 2017 diff hist +25‎ Here We Go Round the Mulberry Bush ‎ →‎Lyrics: def need ref for "The most common modern version": far more online versions end in "So early in the morning" (even in the <score> above!) than in "On a cold and frosty morning", which I had NEVER seen or heard before I read it here just now
• 05:3805:38, 4 December 2017 diff hist +1,344‎ Talk:Vanderbilt University ‎ →‎Why no mention of the Unabomber?: new section
• 05:0505:05, 4 December 2017 diff hist −8‎ Vanderbilt University ‎ →‎Founding and early years: rmv editorializing "Indeed,"
• 04:5704:57, 4 December 2017 diff hist +106‎ E. Gordon Gee ‎ →‎Early life, education, and early career: add Ohio State first-term photo, relocated from Vanderbilt University section
• 04:5404:54, 4 December 2017 diff hist −106‎ E. Gordon Gee ‎ →‎Vanderbilt tenure: relocate Ohio State photo to the correct section
• 04:5304:53, 4 December 2017 diff hist −4‎ E. Gordon Gee ‎ →‎Vanderbilt tenure: newspaper headlines are enclosed in quotation marks, not set in boldface font
• 04:4804:48, 4 December 2017 diff hist −21‎ E. Gordon Gee ‎ →‎Personal life: ce; rmv redundant "the late": her death is mentioned in a more meaningful context in the next sentence; correct awkward, non-idiomatic (in American English, anyway) "life after the death of Elizabeth" to "life after Elizabeth's death"
• 04:3604:36, 4 December 2017 diff hist −33‎ Vanderbilt University ‎ →‎1970s to present: add ¶ break when subject changed; rmv sensational and unencyclopedic "caved in to the public outcry"
• 02:1002:10, 4 December 2017 diff hist 0‎ Asiago cheese ‎ correct pretentious "reminiscent of" and "aspect" to more encyclopedic "similar to" and "appearance"

3 December 2017

• 04:3704:37, 3 December 2017 diff hist −14‎ Citroën ‎ →‎The Goddess: rmv puffery "now legendary"